The Boy Who Stole My HEART by tubbyGEN
Title: The Boy Who Stole My HEART
Author: tubbyGEN
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/bigBANGlovex3/contents.shtml
Reviewed by Joucy @ WonderfulxMemories
Title: 3/5
I don’t know if ‘heart’ was intended to be completely capitalized, but if only the ‘h’ was capitalized, the title would seem more “professional”. The title also did not really catch my attention when I looked at it at first glance.
Poster/Background: 10/10
B-E-A-UTIFUL! Loved it. Ten out of ten :].
Forewords: 5/10
The forewords was short and sweet, and it got me thinking. But it didn’t really hook me into reading more further into the story. Maybe you could elaborate more - give it more details on what you’re trying to come across in your forewords.
Plot: 14/15
Scenes stayed relevant to the story. The ending was nice, since I like happy endings :].
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
Ri-In falls in love with the most perfect guy in school, Jaejoong. Eventually she falls for the guy who she absolutely hated in the beginning. This whole concept is quite common in stories. But instead of just sticking to this concept, you added in a bunch of affairs that made this clichéd main idea more interesting. For instance, Yumi popping into the story out of nowhere completely surprised me. Oh yea, and when Ri-In got into a coma (this is REALLY common in soap operas lol) you added in that scene where Eunhye comes back (which I never really expected to happen). In conclusion, you basically just balanced the clichéd love scenario with those interesting little snippets that no one thought were coming ;). I hope this makes sense =/.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 4/10
There were two most common mistakes that kept on repeating over and over and over again. 1) Capitalizing i’s. Make sure you capitalize every separate i. I’ve seen this in nearly every chapter. 2) Periods at the end. Some sentences just ended without a period, which made them look a bit naked.
The spelling was mediocre, but the vocabulary was dull. Add some spice into your words ;].
Flow: 8/10
Not too fast and not too slow. My only problem is that when you’re trying to explain what’s happening in a certain scene, you automatically get to the point rather than putting in more details and elaborating more on what’s happening. Your story is very straightforward.
Characterization: 9/10
I could grasp your main characters really well in this story. I really liked how you delved into Junsu’s character and slowly unfolded his inner personalities as the story progressed.
Writing Style: 7/10
I don’t really have a problem with your writing style, but I have read many fanfics that were written by authors who have extremely similar writing styles as you. Oh, and beware of grammatical errors.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Honestly, I didn’t hate this fic, nor did I love it. It was so-so. But that’s just my statement. I’m sure there were many others that enjoyed your fic to the fullest, considering the comments people left you.
Total: 76/100
Bonus: 3/5
Sorry for giving you your review so late. Sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry…Man, that Super Junior song just pops into my head whenever I’m in a situation in need for apologizing. Anyway, part of the bonus points goes to Donghae! I was so happy that he got a part in the story. I lovveee him :].
Overall Total: 79/100
Author: tubbyGEN
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/bigBANGlovex3/contents.shtml
Reviewed by Joucy @ WonderfulxMemories
Title: 3/5
I don’t know if ‘heart’ was intended to be completely capitalized, but if only the ‘h’ was capitalized, the title would seem more “professional”. The title also did not really catch my attention when I looked at it at first glance.
Poster/Background: 10/10
B-E-A-UTIFUL! Loved it. Ten out of ten :].
Forewords: 5/10
The forewords was short and sweet, and it got me thinking. But it didn’t really hook me into reading more further into the story. Maybe you could elaborate more - give it more details on what you’re trying to come across in your forewords.
Plot: 14/15
Scenes stayed relevant to the story. The ending was nice, since I like happy endings :].
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
Ri-In falls in love with the most perfect guy in school, Jaejoong. Eventually she falls for the guy who she absolutely hated in the beginning. This whole concept is quite common in stories. But instead of just sticking to this concept, you added in a bunch of affairs that made this clichéd main idea more interesting. For instance, Yumi popping into the story out of nowhere completely surprised me. Oh yea, and when Ri-In got into a coma (this is REALLY common in soap operas lol) you added in that scene where Eunhye comes back (which I never really expected to happen). In conclusion, you basically just balanced the clichéd love scenario with those interesting little snippets that no one thought were coming ;). I hope this makes sense =/.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 4/10
There were two most common mistakes that kept on repeating over and over and over again. 1) Capitalizing i’s. Make sure you capitalize every separate i. I’ve seen this in nearly every chapter. 2) Periods at the end. Some sentences just ended without a period, which made them look a bit naked.
The spelling was mediocre, but the vocabulary was dull. Add some spice into your words ;].
Flow: 8/10
Not too fast and not too slow. My only problem is that when you’re trying to explain what’s happening in a certain scene, you automatically get to the point rather than putting in more details and elaborating more on what’s happening. Your story is very straightforward.
Characterization: 9/10
I could grasp your main characters really well in this story. I really liked how you delved into Junsu’s character and slowly unfolded his inner personalities as the story progressed.
Writing Style: 7/10
I don’t really have a problem with your writing style, but I have read many fanfics that were written by authors who have extremely similar writing styles as you. Oh, and beware of grammatical errors.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
Honestly, I didn’t hate this fic, nor did I love it. It was so-so. But that’s just my statement. I’m sure there were many others that enjoyed your fic to the fullest, considering the comments people left you.
Total: 76/100
Bonus: 3/5
Sorry for giving you your review so late. Sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry…Man, that Super Junior song just pops into my head whenever I’m in a situation in need for apologizing. Anyway, part of the bonus points goes to Donghae! I was so happy that he got a part in the story. I lovveee him :].
Overall Total: 79/100
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