Labyrinth by TaeMin<3
Title: Labyrinth
Author: TaeMin<3
Link : http://winglin.net/fanfic/dark_labyrinth
Reviewed by Rin @ WonderfulxMemories
Title: -/5
Since this is a title for a challenge, I have no say in this area.
Poster/Background/Appearance: 10/10
The poster and background for your story is very well done. The colors aren't all over the place and they match the poster very well.
Forewords: 10/10
I like your forewords a lot because it's plain and simple. It isn't lacking any information and more information isn't needed. So good job. ;]
Plot: 10/15
At first I couldn't figure out what the plot of the story was but towards the end, I sort of got the point but still felt like there was more to it then just her crying at the fact that Taemin announced that he was going out with his girlfriend to the public. It seemed more like a cliffhanger than the end.
Characterization: 7/10
You did well on the characters but there wasn't enough of them you know? I felt like Taemin was mentioned once or twice even though he was one of the main characters but since it's a one-shot, there isn't much time to try to change any characters as quickly. But Yunni did seem to change because she was very bubbly at first then she became all sad and depressed.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
This story was quite creative in it's own way. With her being a newbie actress getting to act with Big Bang, DBSK, and SHINee and everything. For a new actress she's very carefree because if I was new, I would be there on time but Yunni has a very perky personality which I like. The most overused scenarios in stories/movies is the fact that one person is just so in love with another person but they cannot tell them because they have a girlfriend/boyfriend. So I deducted points.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
I've spotted no spelling or grammar mistakes.
Flow: 7/10
The flow was a little rushed and not at a steady pace because you kept jumping back and forth. I was confused that you would talk about Yunni and then jump into another point of view where she is in this labyrinth. It threw me off because I thought there was more to it then you switch all of a sudden. But I did get the point of the little excerpt of the girl being in the labyrinth.
Writing Style: 10/15
I like your writing style but you didn't portray enough emotions and actions into the sentences. You only wrote dialogues but sometimes you didn't say who was actually speaking or what they were doing.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I enjoyed reading it although it was very short. I still feel like I was left hanging when I completed your story but overall, your story was great.
Total: 77/95
Bonus: 5/5
Overall Total: 82/100
Author: TaeMin<3
Link : http://winglin.net/fanfic/dark_labyrinth
Reviewed by Rin @ WonderfulxMemories
Title: -/5
Since this is a title for a challenge, I have no say in this area.
Poster/Background/Appearance: 10/10
The poster and background for your story is very well done. The colors aren't all over the place and they match the poster very well.
Forewords: 10/10
I like your forewords a lot because it's plain and simple. It isn't lacking any information and more information isn't needed. So good job. ;]
Plot: 10/15
At first I couldn't figure out what the plot of the story was but towards the end, I sort of got the point but still felt like there was more to it then just her crying at the fact that Taemin announced that he was going out with his girlfriend to the public. It seemed more like a cliffhanger than the end.
Characterization: 7/10
You did well on the characters but there wasn't enough of them you know? I felt like Taemin was mentioned once or twice even though he was one of the main characters but since it's a one-shot, there isn't much time to try to change any characters as quickly. But Yunni did seem to change because she was very bubbly at first then she became all sad and depressed.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
This story was quite creative in it's own way. With her being a newbie actress getting to act with Big Bang, DBSK, and SHINee and everything. For a new actress she's very carefree because if I was new, I would be there on time but Yunni has a very perky personality which I like. The most overused scenarios in stories/movies is the fact that one person is just so in love with another person but they cannot tell them because they have a girlfriend/boyfriend. So I deducted points.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
I've spotted no spelling or grammar mistakes.
Flow: 7/10
The flow was a little rushed and not at a steady pace because you kept jumping back and forth. I was confused that you would talk about Yunni and then jump into another point of view where she is in this labyrinth. It threw me off because I thought there was more to it then you switch all of a sudden. But I did get the point of the little excerpt of the girl being in the labyrinth.
Writing Style: 10/15
I like your writing style but you didn't portray enough emotions and actions into the sentences. You only wrote dialogues but sometimes you didn't say who was actually speaking or what they were doing.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I enjoyed reading it although it was very short. I still feel like I was left hanging when I completed your story but overall, your story was great.
Total: 77/95
Bonus: 5/5
Overall Total: 82/100
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