On and On by Pink Princess
Title : On and On
Author : Pink Princess
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/PinkPrincess11/
Reviewed by Joucy @ WonderfulxMemories
I’m kind of a harsh reviewer, so if this offended you in any way, I apologize in advance. Well, read on :].
Title: 5/5
Capitalizations were in correct places, and the title itself looked appealing.
Poster/Background/Appearance: 10/10
The poster’s AWESOME!
Forewords: 10/10
I think I’ll go in the corner and cry my eyes out. Lol your forewords was depressing! But anyway, your forewords was great! It made me want to continue with the story.
Plot: 10/15
The introduction and the ending was fine. Everything was relevant to the story, but I feel like this story was too cloudy. One unanswered question may not sound huge, but in stories, an unanswered question will bother the reader ‘till the end. What was the object that Yunho handed to Ri-In towards the end of the story? Was it an actual film/video that taped special memories of Ri-In and Junsu? Was it the “A Memorable Piece” book belonging to Junsu? Or was the “film” just a figure of speech?
Characterization: 3/10
From reading this fic, I found out that Junsu is a merry little dude that likes to smile and laugh a lot…and has a dolphin-like laugh. But I couldn’t get anything out of Ri-In and Yunho. Even with Junsu I couldn’t really physically picture him in my mind. You should describe your characters more, which you can do by showing the readers each character’s personality through imagery or dialogue.
Creativity/Originality: 5/10
This story seemed like just another one of those moody, poignant stories. There has been a lot of fics on winglin that portray someone dying from sickness with a loved one mourning afterwards.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
Your grammar and vocabulary was better than the average winglin writer, but I still found some grammatical mistakes here and there. There were also some sentences that had perfect grammar but didn‘t sound right, or would have sounded better if placed with better word choices.
Flow: 10/10
Not too fast, and not too slow.
Writing Style: 15/15
I had no problem with your writing style. It was interesting and stood out.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
I didn’t hate it, but I didn’t exactly enjoy it either. Your writing style was interesting, but the overall design of the story didn’t really captivate my interest. But, of course, this is only one opinion commenting on your story.
Total : 79/100
Bonus : 2/5
I can sense that you put effort into this fanfic. Therefore, bonus points will be awarded! Oh yea, once again, I’m sorry if this review offended you in any way. You’re welcome to correct any of my misunderstandings through email.
Overall Total : 81/100
Author : Pink Princess
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/PinkPrincess11/
Reviewed by Joucy @ WonderfulxMemories
I’m kind of a harsh reviewer, so if this offended you in any way, I apologize in advance. Well, read on :].
Title: 5/5
Capitalizations were in correct places, and the title itself looked appealing.
Poster/Background/Appearance: 10/10
The poster’s AWESOME!
Forewords: 10/10
I think I’ll go in the corner and cry my eyes out. Lol your forewords was depressing! But anyway, your forewords was great! It made me want to continue with the story.
Plot: 10/15
The introduction and the ending was fine. Everything was relevant to the story, but I feel like this story was too cloudy. One unanswered question may not sound huge, but in stories, an unanswered question will bother the reader ‘till the end. What was the object that Yunho handed to Ri-In towards the end of the story? Was it an actual film/video that taped special memories of Ri-In and Junsu? Was it the “A Memorable Piece” book belonging to Junsu? Or was the “film” just a figure of speech?
Characterization: 3/10
From reading this fic, I found out that Junsu is a merry little dude that likes to smile and laugh a lot…and has a dolphin-like laugh. But I couldn’t get anything out of Ri-In and Yunho. Even with Junsu I couldn’t really physically picture him in my mind. You should describe your characters more, which you can do by showing the readers each character’s personality through imagery or dialogue.
Creativity/Originality: 5/10
This story seemed like just another one of those moody, poignant stories. There has been a lot of fics on winglin that portray someone dying from sickness with a loved one mourning afterwards.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
Your grammar and vocabulary was better than the average winglin writer, but I still found some grammatical mistakes here and there. There were also some sentences that had perfect grammar but didn‘t sound right, or would have sounded better if placed with better word choices.
Flow: 10/10
Not too fast, and not too slow.
Writing Style: 15/15
I had no problem with your writing style. It was interesting and stood out.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
I didn’t hate it, but I didn’t exactly enjoy it either. Your writing style was interesting, but the overall design of the story didn’t really captivate my interest. But, of course, this is only one opinion commenting on your story.
Total : 79/100
Bonus : 2/5
I can sense that you put effort into this fanfic. Therefore, bonus points will be awarded! Oh yea, once again, I’m sorry if this review offended you in any way. You’re welcome to correct any of my misunderstandings through email.
Overall Total : 81/100
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