BitterSweet Love (One-Shots) by YoonHee

Title : BitterSweet Love (One-Shots)
Author : YoonHee
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Minty/chapter_2.shtml
Reviewed by Mickey @ WonderfulxMemories

`Story Title [did it catch my attention?] : 3/5
I thought that the title didn’t really relate to that one one-shot, but since this is a one-shot, I guess that’s fine. The title didn’t really catch my attention, but just seemed like a regular title.

`Appearance [what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : -/10
I usually don’t really read stories without posters or backgrounds, so knowing that you didn’t have a poster or background, I won’t count this part.

`Forewords [did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10
The forewords was boring, but only because it’s a one-shot. I know that one-shots usually don’t have much information, especially if it’s an application one-shot.

`Plot [was the plot cliché or was it interesting?] : 13/15
The ply was actually really unique. I’ve never read anything like it before. It was different.

`Characterization [was I able to learn about the characters?] : 6/10
I wasn’t really able to get the characters. There were parts to when I was able to go along with the characters and know about them, but you didn’t really describe them. I wasn’t able to visualize them in my head.

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 9/10
It was creative and I thought it had a lot of originality. It was different from any other story I have read. Great job.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary [was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 8/10
There wasn’t really much that bothered me with the understanding of your story. There were some grammar mistakes, but they weren’t that big.

`Flow [was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 6/10
I thought that the flow was a little bit too fast for me. It seemed like everything was happening in rush, that I wasn’t able to catch up with everything. Details left out, but the describing and everything was fine.

`Writing Style [did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 15/15
I had absolutely no trouble with your writing style. I thought that I was perfect, and it was really easy for me to read without going back to re-read and everything.

`Overall Enjoyment [did I enjoy this story?] : 4/5
I really enjoyed the story, but there seemed to be something missing for me. But overall, it was a great story. (:

`Total : 69/90

`Bonus : 3/5

Overall Total: 72/90

Chocolates and My Hearts

Title : Chocolates and My Hearts
Author : tinchiq
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/chocolateheart/
Reviewed by Elena @ WonderfulxMemories

`This review has nothing to do with any personal arguements or anything of that sort. I'm really sorry if I'm harsh.
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`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5
* I like your story title. It was nice and interesting in a cliche way but I don't see the relationship between the title and the story.

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 7/10
* My impression was, 'I wonder what this story is about. Another cliche story, I suppose'. After reading the forewords, I was like, 'This story is really interesting'.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10
* Your forewords invites readers to continue but I think it's too short and simple.

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 13/15
I've heard of such story but I've never read it before. Even so, this types of story is rare. Your story was entirely a refreshing story to me. Good job!

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 4/10
Your characterization wasn't good enough. The characters in a story are described in two aspects, which is, physical aspect and mental aspect. Physically, there was not much at all. Mentally, you slipped in a bit there and here.

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 7/10
* Your story was really creative. The originality of story is 80%.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 5/10
* There was quite a number of spelling mistakes. Especially the word 'were'. I think it was a spelling mistake, not a typing mistake as there many similiar mistakes. You grammar is average. I spotted a bit of grammar mistake here and there in your story.

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 6/10
* I think the flow of the story was not balanced but yet, it was interesting and good for a reader.

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 9/15
* Your writing style is just average. It was easy for me to read your story.

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5
*I enjoyed it fully. XD

`Total : 64/100

`Bonus : 5/5
* This is for your effort and your story that is extremely nice,in my opinion.
Overall Total: 69/100