Chocolates and My Hearts
Title : Chocolates and My Hearts
Author : tinchiq
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/chocolateheart/
Reviewed by Elena @ WonderfulxMemories
`This review has nothing to do with any personal arguements or anything of that sort. I'm really sorry if I'm harsh.
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`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5
* I like your story title. It was nice and interesting in a cliche way but I don't see the relationship between the title and the story.
`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 7/10
* My impression was, 'I wonder what this story is about. Another cliche story, I suppose'. After reading the forewords, I was like, 'This story is really interesting'.
`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10
* Your forewords invites readers to continue but I think it's too short and simple.
`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 13/15
I've heard of such story but I've never read it before. Even so, this types of story is rare. Your story was entirely a refreshing story to me. Good job!
`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 4/10
Your characterization wasn't good enough. The characters in a story are described in two aspects, which is, physical aspect and mental aspect. Physically, there was not much at all. Mentally, you slipped in a bit there and here.
`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 7/10
* Your story was really creative. The originality of story is 80%.
`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 5/10
* There was quite a number of spelling mistakes. Especially the word 'were'. I think it was a spelling mistake, not a typing mistake as there many similiar mistakes. You grammar is average. I spotted a bit of grammar mistake here and there in your story.
`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 6/10
* I think the flow of the story was not balanced but yet, it was interesting and good for a reader.
`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 9/15
* Your writing style is just average. It was easy for me to read your story.
`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5
*I enjoyed it fully. XD
`Total : 64/100
`Bonus : 5/5
* This is for your effort and your story that is extremely nice,in my opinion.
Overall Total: 69/100
Author : tinchiq
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/chocolateheart/
Reviewed by Elena @ WonderfulxMemories
`This review has nothing to do with any personal arguements or anything of that sort. I'm really sorry if I'm harsh.
===========
`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5
* I like your story title. It was nice and interesting in a cliche way but I don't see the relationship between the title and the story.
`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 7/10
* My impression was, 'I wonder what this story is about. Another cliche story, I suppose'. After reading the forewords, I was like, 'This story is really interesting'.
`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10
* Your forewords invites readers to continue but I think it's too short and simple.
`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 13/15
I've heard of such story but I've never read it before. Even so, this types of story is rare. Your story was entirely a refreshing story to me. Good job!
`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 4/10
Your characterization wasn't good enough. The characters in a story are described in two aspects, which is, physical aspect and mental aspect. Physically, there was not much at all. Mentally, you slipped in a bit there and here.
`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 7/10
* Your story was really creative. The originality of story is 80%.
`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 5/10
* There was quite a number of spelling mistakes. Especially the word 'were'. I think it was a spelling mistake, not a typing mistake as there many similiar mistakes. You grammar is average. I spotted a bit of grammar mistake here and there in your story.
`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 6/10
* I think the flow of the story was not balanced but yet, it was interesting and good for a reader.
`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 9/15
* Your writing style is just average. It was easy for me to read your story.
`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5
*I enjoyed it fully. XD
`Total : 64/100
`Bonus : 5/5
* This is for your effort and your story that is extremely nice,in my opinion.
Overall Total: 69/100
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