Where Might You Be? by shardaunei

Title : Where Might You Be?
Author : shardaunei
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/wmyb/
Reviewed by ChinYu @ WonderfulxMemories

~Reviewer's Note : This review was not slanted in anyway. I tried to keep everything as unbiased as possible.~

Story Title : 5/5
The title tied into the story well.
It would definitely attract my attention if I were scrolling through winglin looking for a new fic to read

Appearance : 6/10
Well, right off the bat I knew I'd love this story with the poster. It was beautiful and really interesting.
The pictures of Maki really complimented the personalities of the three girls.
The background, however, made the text hard to read.

Forewords : 9/10
Sakurai Sho?! Wu Chun?! Vanessa Hudgens?! This story has more stars than the Oscars! (lame joke, sorry -.-)
After reading the cast list I knew I would love this story.
The forewords described the story to a T.
The characters were described wonderfully, and I was really able to picture the them while I read.
Well done.

Plot : 13/15
I think I've seen something like this before. But not like you wrote it. It was very original and interesting. It was definitely a page turner for me. I loved the plot and the intertwined stories of the triplets. This should be a Japanese drama....staring everyone in your fic.

Characterization : 7/10
You described the characters wonderfully in the forewords. You kept their personalities pretty consistent throughout the fic. It could have used a little bit more detail.

Creativity/Originality : 8/10
It was really original. You did say you saw Saan Ka Man Naroroon(I've seen it as well) which had a similar theme and plot to it.
But you definitely added your own flare and style to it.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary : 8/10
I didn't notice many spelling and grammar mistakes. Just a few minor ones here and there, probably typos.
You had a wide range of both English and Japanese vocab. I think it really added to the effect of the story. And you added translations at the end(some fics don't.) Which helped us non-Japanese speakers understand the story better.

Flow : 9/10
You had pretty consistent flow. A few speed bumps here and there, but nothing that took away from the feel of the story.
It wasn't too fast, or too slow. Just right.

Writing Style : 13/15
A few times I had to go back and re-read a paragraph because the way you wrote it was a little confusing; nothing major. It was just a couple of incidents.
Your writing style was simple and clean. Very easy to read.

Overall Enjoyment : 5/5
This fic had all of my favorites in it(sho, wu zun, toma ikuta). And I really loved the story line.
Other than that background(which I wouldn't read a fic if it had a background like that. Made the text very had to read)
I loved it. And I'm definitely going to read your one-shot. =)
Giving you full points.

Total : 83/100

Bonus : 5/5
that cast list....amazing!

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Overall Total: 88/100

Quadrilateral Affection by e.c.jereza_stargazer

Title : Quadrilateral Affection
Author : e.c.jereza_stargazer
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/QA/
Reviewed by Elena @ WonderfulxMemories

*Reviewer's Note : this review has nothing to do with any personal misunderstanding with the author or anything of that sort. I'm seriously sorry if I was rude or harsh. This a honest review.

`Story Title : 4/5
*The story's title was compatible with the plot.

`Appearance : 5/10
*I do admit that the story's forewords and poster were attractive but it was still an ordinary story.

`Forewords : 6/10
*Your forewords were good.

`Plot : 10/15
*I know that your story was entirely cliche but the way you placed the twists and spices in your story were good. This can impress anyone.

`Characterisation : 5/10
*You were okay in describing your characters but you can still add more into your plot.

`Creativity/Originality : 5/10
*As I said before, your story was entirely cliche but it was good in it's own way.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary : 5/10
*There were bits of mistake in your work. Your choice of vocabulary was completely ordinary.

`Flow : 6/10
*I love your story's pace. It was balanced and nice.

`Writing Style : 9/15
*Your style was ordinary but yet good for anyone to read and enjoy

`Overall Enjoyment : 4/5
`Total : 59/100

`Bonus : 5/5

Overall Total: 64/100

My Girlfriend is My Bodyguard by Acc.

Title : My Girlfriend is My Bodyguard
Author : Acc.
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/acc_randoms
Reviewed by Kiyoko @ WonderfulxMemories

Please don’t take it personally; I am just sharing my opinion on your story.

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5
It did catch my attention, but I did see similar titles to it.

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 7/10
The poster kind of caught my attention, but it's not eye catching. Adding some quotes would help readers read more.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10
You did introduce the characters and say the plot, but you should also say their personality of their characters. And adding a preview would be nice for people to read more(:

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 12/15
The plot is simple but yet interesting. I never read a story about a girl being undercover as a bodyguard, so it caught my attention to read more.

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 5/10
. You did introduce the characters, but adding what their personality is would make readers know more about the characters.

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 8/10
This was pretty original, but there are some plots like this. But from other plots I read, this was the only plot that they made a kendo- skilled girl be a bodyguard.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 10/10
Your spelling, vocabulary, and grammar was very impressive! You have a very wide range of vocabulary!(:

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 8/10
Your flow was smooth, but at some parts it did get kind of slow for me.

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`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 13/15
I liked your writing style. It’s not crunched up and easy to read, but some chapters were too long. You can also combine some sentences if some sentences are too short or don’t make your sentences too long since some were long.

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 5/5
I love your story! It made me laugh, but it did make me sad at points.

`Total : 76/100

`Bonus : 5/5
I love your story, and I gave you full bonus for your wide range of vocabulary(:

Overall Total: 81/100

Not Enough Love by 'Niii

Title : Not Enough Love [oneshot]
Author : 'Niii
Link : http://winglin.net/fanfic/not_enough/
Reviewed by Elena @ WonderfulxMemories

*Reviewer's Note : this review has nothing to do with any personal misunderstanding with the author or anything of that sort. I'm seriously sorry if I was rude or harsh. This a honest review.

`Story Title[did it catch my attention?] : 3/5
*Your story title was weird. It attracted my attention.

`Appearance[what was my first impression? Did it catch my attention?] : 6/10
*It was pretty interesting. The guardian angel concept is totally rare these days.

`Forewords[did your forewords make me wanting to read more?] : 5/10
*Your forewords were nice but I find it to be quite confusing.

`Plot[was the plot cliche or was it interesting?] : 9/15
*Your plot was nice. It was interesting. I'm still confused if the relationship between both the characters is friendship or love.

`Characterization[was I able to learn about the characters?] : 3/10
*Your characterization was poor. You need to elaborate more on characters.

`Creativity/Originality[was it creative?] : 6/10
*The storyline was very creative and original.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary[was I able to understand what you were trying to say?] : 5/10
*There were spelling mistakes. Your grammar needs improvement and you need to use more uncommon words.

`Flow[was it too fast or too slow to my liking?] : 4/10
*Your flow was too fast.

`Writing Style[did your writing style make it easy for me to read?] : 9/15
*Your writing style was simple and nice.

`Overall Enjoyment[did I enjoy this story?] : 3/5
`Total : 53/100

`Bonus : 5/5

Overall Total: 58/100

Fall for you by YoonHee

Title: Fall for You
Author: YoonHee
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Minty/chapter_6.shtml
Reviewer: Lyselmae Atienza @ WXM



`Story Title: 3/5

Yes, I liked your title. It was captivating, yet simple. The problem I had with your title was that it didn’t have much of a connection with the actual one-shot, therefore it became confusing. Please do remember that the title basically summarizes the whole story into one. One suggestion I have for you is to write the one-shot first, and after writing it, make up a title that you think is relevant for the story. This helps a lot because you are free without any restrictions.



`Appearance: 6/10

When I first opened the link, I wasn’t too appealed. There was no poster/bg which usually makes the fanfic more eye-catchy. It seemed a bit organized though.


`Forewords: 3/10

There was particularly anything in the forewords about this one-shot except for the characters. AGAIN, take your time to organize everything. Maybe, you can make a small portion in the forewords for each OS you make.


`Plot: 8/15

The plot was all over the place. I didn’t understand where one event came from and another. Please do organize the events in your story. I didn’t quite understand the whole story since it went by TOO fast. It seemed to be an account instead of a story.


`Characterization: 8/10

Since this was a requested one-shot, I have no right to mark you on the choice of characters. The problem you encountered was that you weren’t able to portray the personalities of the characters well enough. In order for the readers to be able to understand and learn more about the characters, you must show them the real characteristics of the starring artists.


`Creativity/Originality: 6/10

Everything happened too fast for you to be able to add your own creativity. Concerning your originality, I think this is pretty original… Again, please take things slowly for you to be able to add more intense scenes and add more interest in the story.


`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 6/10

Here, everything was all over the place. You hadn’t reached my expectations. The MAIN thing I want you to improve on is RECHECKING, REREADING, and REEDITING. Spelling; you tend to make mistakes due to lack of re-reading your stories after completion. Yes, it is obvious due to the constant mistakes. Grammar; your grammar would’ve been good if you had organized your tenses. In some cases you were writing in the past tense, but you immediately changed into present which was not good. Remember to stay on one tense. Vocabulary; your precision of words were rather normal and alright. I had no problems. Just keep in mind to NOT repeat words/phrases in one sentence, alright?


`Flow: 5/10

The flow was too fast. Do lengthen the story so readers can enjoy ;)


`Writing Style[: 11/15

Your writing style was simple. I didn’t have much of a problem with it than I usually do with scripts. Do maintain this.


`Overall Enjoyment: 2/5

It was alright :)


`Total : 55/100

`Bonus : 4/5
I’m sorry for the wait :S & Sorry for being strict on you. I sure hope you take my suggestions into consideration :)

Overall Total: 59/100

Title : Internet Romance
Author : WinterNight
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/beautifulwish/
Reviewed by Elena @ WonderfulxMemories

*This review has nothing to do with any personal misunderstanding or anything of that sort. It is an honest review on a story. I'm seriously sorry if I am harsh or rude.

`Story Title : 3/5
* Your story title was too simple.

`Appearance : 5/10
*I knew the storyline would be slightly different but my expectations were average.

`Forewords : 5/10
*Your forewords gave a short preview on the story but there is room for more.

`Plot : 7/15
*Your plot is not entirely cliche'. Your story is a bit interesting but it still is a common plot line.

`Characterization : 5/10
*Your characterization was not balanced. You explained a lot about Jiro but not much on Selina. So, you should elaborate more on the main character.

`Creativity/Originality : 5/10
*Your story is not original. Your creativity was limited.

`Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary : 4/10
*There were sometimes I don't understand your story. You got a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes.

`Flow: 6/10
*Your flow was balanced throughout most of the story.

`Writing Style : 6/15
*Your writing style needs improvement. I wasn't able to understand your story at some points.

`Overall Enjoyment : 3/5

`Total : 49/100

`Bonus : 5/5

Overall Total: 54/100