When Death Spoke To Her by The Unfaithful One

Title : When Death Spoke To Her
Author : The Unfaithful One
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/chair/
Reviewed by ChinYu @ WonderfulxMemories

Story Title: 5/5
Very creative, and eye catching.
Draws into the story perfectly.
I'd definitely click on it if I saw it on the winglin list

Appearance: 7/10
Colors were great. You had that dark, black, eerie theme to it.
The poster was nice, the photos of Chun and Ella had different quality and lighting, but great nonetheless.

Forewords: 4/10
Very nice teaser. Made me want to read more.
But you didn't add much as to what the story was to be about,
Who the characters were, setting, ect ect.
Points knocked off for not having that.

Plot: 8/15
The plot was very original. I've never seen a fanfiction quite like this.
However, it was really hard for me to discover the plot. I'm still not positive I understand the plot and theme you were trying to push.
It took me a few reads to finally get my interpretation of the plot. Very original and creative, though.

Characterization: 4/10
I wasn't really able to get much insight into the characters.
There was some, and the some that was there was deep.
But there could have been much more detail as to who the characters were and what they were like.

Creativity/Originality: 8/10
It was really creative and original. Like I said, I haven't seen a fanfiction like this one before.
It was dark and eerie and a love story.
It was amazing how you were to connect these two themes and make this fanfiction function well.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
Spelling and grammar were up to par. There wasn't many mistakes I saw.
And your vocabulary was vibrant and full. You definitely have a wider word bank than some writers.

Flow: 7/10
It had some minor speed-bumps that had me re-reading what you had wrote.
Other than that your flow was nice and consistent.
Up until the last chapter.
I was confused and didn't know what was going on for the first part.
It would have been nice for a little note saying it was going to be two different people.

Writing Style: 11/15
There was a lot of dialogue. And not much details.
Though, you definitely have a way with words.
The story was very well put together.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I love FeiLunHai and S.H.E couple fics.
Especially chunxella fics.
And this the 'love' theme was very subtle and hidden, but really amazing story.

Total : 67/100